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Sundown

Sundown
Like a lover, the sun goes down
Its burning flames spreading all around
Heated touches, fanning desires
Out of the shadows from which it inspires
Dark caresses of reflecting light
Tickling the shores of the sensual night
Golden promises of tomorrow's dreams
Shudders and sighs with nocturnal screams
Of heated passions, the day came and went
Into the night, its energies spent

Copyright © emmarie 27/4/99

emmarie is my pen name that I use on all my writings. It is a combination of my first and middle name.
kit10ish is my online nickname

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Mar/4/2007, 4:12 am

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hello. i like your poetry. you have deep metaphors and nice word usage but what do you mean by only the second line which goes "Like a lover, the sun goes down"? i like how you write by the way the way you structure your poems is really nice.

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What the line means to me is unimportant. What it means to you has its own significance. :)

Thank you for your kind words.

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Mar/4/2007, 7:35 am

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sorry i wasn't asking what does it mean in terms of importance, but i don't understand it. Like a lover, the sun goes down. What are you saying by a lover going down like the sun? I can not quite understand it.

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Mar/4/2007, 7:52 am

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Oh, ok. I have been told that the statement had a sexual connotation. To me, it meant that a lover would be alit with fire (passion), but eventually would burn out, have to leave our sight temporarily. If you have watched sunsets, as the sun goes down, you can see its heat in colors disperse thru the clouds, as if waving goodbye until tomorrow. I'm not sure if I am making any more sense for you or creating more confusiion.

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Mar/4/2007, 8:08 am

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hello. i like your poetry. you have deep metaphors and nice word usage but what do you mean by only the second line which goes "Like a lover, the sun goes down"? i like how you write by the way the way you structure your poems is really nice.

That's usually what my spitfire ends up doing on the Combat Flight Simulator :D :D :D I spend most of my time on there learning to swim :D :D :D

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I say......that was jolly good.

After reeding that I don't think I will bother posting any of my work (if I can call it that)........That was amazing :D :D :D

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I'm glad you enjoyed it. And I doubt it is any better than your poetry or anyone elses, as much as I doubt you'll stop writing. ;)

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Mar/5/2007, 10:45 pm

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You obviously haven't read any of my poetry :D :D :D LOL :D

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Mar/6/2007, 10:50 am

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Tried to find some to read in here. And didn't find one to read! Is it hidden elsewhere?

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