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Virtual Symphony

Virtual Symphony

Dusk taps its baton on the window
The signal for the music to begin
Sunlight flickers down to darkness
A spotlight then glows from within

Instruments beckon to fingers
Heartstrings prepare for the play
Love notes arranged in order
The symphony now on its way

A duet that would last for hours
Together the music is made
Side by side the sounds of passion
An orchestra virtually arrayed

Their music flows like a river
As it twists and bends through the heart
A rhythmic beat so subtle
No one knows the end or the start

Then dawn taps on the window
And the love notes fly up with the sun
The seats in the house are empty
Like the music that's left played by one

Alone with the dream of the music
She arises and takes a bow
No standing ovation is given
For her dream has left her now.

Copyright © emmarie aka kit10ish 14 May 1999

note: this poem was written about online romance

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Mar/4/2007, 4:23 am

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Very good indeed......although I lack the knowledge to give you a better review :D :D :D LOL :D

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It was written after viewing a piece of artwork. A woman, sad, standing alone on a balcony. Below her were empty orchestra chairs. A cello sat in the corner. Beyond the chairs was a river of musical notes. When I saw it at the time, the image of romance online came to mind.

I've seen where Sticks and Stones can give a tough review, and I've been waiting to see what that person may have to say about my poems. BTW I did see the old pilot poem you posted. My father had been in the USAF, so I had seen that poem before. A classic!

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Mar/5/2007, 11:03 pm

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High flight - yes, I'd have to say that that's one of my favourites.....I'm a pilot (when I get the time that is) so I find it very uplifting :D :D :D

Hopefully they will see your work.......and give it a thumbs up. That's what I give it ;)

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Thank you.

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You're welcome ;)

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That is truly a great poem! The metaphors throughout, the imagery created and the overall flow and structure of the piece, a really really great poem. I found myself singing – the sign of a good poem, a well-structured piece, is when you can read it once through without even having to stop.

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And Kev here know's what he is talking about so I must be right in saying you have talent :D :D :D LOL :D

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:) I believe I am blushing. Thank you both so much! It is always so very nice to hear good things about your own writing, especially when you are your own worst critic.

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I know exactly what you mean. I've posted quite a few of my "works of art" in the Artwork and Artists section........that's what I usually end up doing :D :D :D

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