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Clouds

Clouds

Once in awhile the clouds stand still
And block away the sun
They linger, casting shadows dark
Until the day is done

Sometimes when the moon is full
And breathes a life of its own
The darkness creeps upon the earth
Its music, a melodic tone

And when the sun returns at dawn
It glistens on the dew,
Which dissapates beneath the heat
And deepens the sky of blue

The clouds float past the dawn's new day
In search of other lands
The sun beats down upon the earth
To turn its soil to sands

Another night returns the cool
And soothing evening breeze
The stillness touches every dream
With hopes that merely tease

And like a rock that just exists
Upon the sands of time
Life crumbles and returns
Like mountains for all to climb.

Copyright © emmarie 4/4/96

An older poem, not so good, eh?

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no this is just as good i think personally better because you leave space to think it is not as clear and my view is the rhyme is clever.

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Was a bit worried after posting the last three poems that perhaps they were so bad they weren't worth commenting on. Thank you!

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Was an ejoyable poem to read but you turned an average poem into a great one merely with the last stanza.

And like a rock that just exists
Upon the sands of time
Life crumbles and returns
Like mountains for all to climb

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