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Evenflown
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IHE, your poetry is amazing. I wish I could offer some constructive criticism to you to help you take your poetry further but you are already on a different level than so many other poets, including myself. Keep up the good work.
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"Pity me that the heart is slow to learn
What the swift mind beholds at every turn."
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IHeartErik
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Re: Poems To Twist The Mind & Melt The Senses-By IHE
The cold damp cement smells of earth and daylight
The frogs sing their songs into the chilly humid night.
I walk in steady rhythm with their thrumming song.
All of my thoughts are filled with you.
I can still feel your hand in mine, gentle and sure.
I can picture your hair, curly from the summer moisture,
framing your face in halos of gold spun silk
You whisper things to me from your summer lips,
your dress billowing around your ankles like mist in a willow.
I can smell your perfume and peppermint breath
as you run through the fields, the golden wheat brushing your arms.
I loved you this way, framed in blue sky, a sea of gold around you.
As if a living breathing work of art had come alive and smiled at me.
Then sorrow floods me as I am pulled from my memories by the autumn air.
The fall leaves brush my face as they fall lifelessly
My tears follow them in a race to earth, where you now sleep.
The hot summer nights would have held so much more
had I known you would leave with the flowers,
wilting in my helpless arms that had no waters to save you.
We said goodbye in hushed tearful whispers
And with our final kiss, I tasted your last breath.
I layed you into the ground with the flowers around you and all
Of your beauty was with you, frozen in my mind.
Then reluctantly I had said goodbye
Now as I walk I feel you warm my heart like the last breath of summer.
Haunting me with the chirping of frogs and the smells of the earth.
It is your final goodbye to me, your final goodbye to summer.
For when it flies so will you beyond the golden fields and off into the blue.
Meh, not bad. I whipped it up at work today. Needs some tinkering.
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Re: Poems To Twist The Mind & Melt The Senses-By IHE
The last poem that was posted is fantastic writing. I was pleasantly surprised to find this forum, the standard of poetry is incredible!
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Aug/19/2006, 7:02 pm
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Some reviews from you lovely Poets would be awsome.
